Teaser Tuesday

Posted on April 27, 2010 by Phoebe 7 Comments

Do you want to meet my mermaids? You know you do.

(Teaser removed)

7 comments

  • Patrick says:

    "Gat", he said, cocking the word as he would the object that also bore that name.

    You can have that one for free.

  • Phoebe says:

    Thanks, Pat. Thanks bunches.

  • Jaimie says:

    Haha, we had nearly exactly similar comments on Nathan Bransford's blog (and at the same time, too). I think we were both trying to say: SHORELINE had serious promise, but fix the query construction, lol.

    And I really like this. There's a very compelling character in Loril.

    • Phoebe says:

      Hey Jaimie! Thanks–I'm glad you like him.

      Yeah, i laughed when I saw your response. We must be on the same psychic wavelength! I saw a few thorny things about SHORELINE's premise (Persephone doesn't seem relevant enough in the existing mythology to pull her in, but maybe the author makes it work), but I probably would read it anyway. But since the contest asks us to think like an agent, I think you gotta go for the clearest, most gripping query.

      I hope you don't mind if I check out your blog! Looks like you're at the query stage, too? It's brutal!

  • Jaimie says:

    Oh yeah, please check out my blog. That's what it's there for. Yep, I'm querying. Sorta. I sent out about 7, got no bites, so I'm reworking the silly thing before I try again. (And the rework was much needed, I think.)

  • Phoebe says:

    I think I'm on my 6th query draft, which has gotten me two full requests–before that it was almost entirely form rejections. Hopefully that's a sign that I'm done revising. It's so hard to get it right! I'll take a look at the one you've posted, see if I have any suggestions. I must say, though, that I totally dig the idea of Ares as a suburban dad!

  • Jaimie says:

    Thank you so much for your suggestions!

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