Comments on: Teaser Tuesday

By: Jaimie

Jaimie — Tue, 27 Apr 2010 17:53:40 +0000

Thank you so much for your suggestions!

By: Phoebe

Phoebe — Tue, 27 Apr 2010 16:45:19 +0000

I think I'm on my 6th query draft, which has gotten me two full requests–before that it was almost entirely form rejections. Hopefully that's a sign that I'm done revising. It's so hard to get it right! I'll take a look at the one you've posted, see if I have any suggestions. I must say, though, that I totally dig the idea of Ares as a suburban dad!

By: Jaimie

Jaimie — Tue, 27 Apr 2010 16:37:52 +0000

Oh yeah, please check out my blog. That's what it's there for. Yep, I'm querying. Sorta. I sent out about 7, got no bites, so I'm reworking the silly thing before I try again. (And the rework was much needed, I think.)

By: Phoebe

Phoebe — Tue, 27 Apr 2010 16:29:47 +0000

Hey Jaimie! Thanks–I'm glad you like him.

Yeah, i laughed when I saw your response. We must be on the same psychic wavelength! I saw a few thorny things about SHORELINE's premise (Persephone doesn't seem relevant enough in the existing mythology to pull her in, but maybe the author makes it work), but I probably would read it anyway. But since the contest asks us to think like an agent, I think you gotta go for the clearest, most gripping query.

I hope you don't mind if I check out your blog! Looks like you're at the query stage, too? It's brutal!

By: Jaimie

Jaimie — Tue, 27 Apr 2010 16:25:26 +0000

Haha, we had nearly exactly similar comments on Nathan Bransford's blog (and at the same time, too). I think we were both trying to say: SHORELINE had serious promise, but fix the query construction, lol.

And I really like this. There's a very compelling character in Loril.

By: Phoebe

Phoebe — Tue, 27 Apr 2010 16:20:26 +0000

Thanks, Pat. Thanks bunches.

By: Patrick

Patrick — Tue, 27 Apr 2010 16:15:41 +0000

"Gat", he said, cocking the word as he would the object that also bore that name.

You can have that one for free.